Guys, come in and check my business letter...

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pls give a hand and find the wrong in my letter, Thx in advance :hug:

is that your first letter to this client?
~+_i9e&h If so, this mail maybe get into the junk mail. coz you attached the file, tW5BK W|h
I do not think the first letter with attachment is a good.
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What's your title? any payment information? delivery date?

Not bad. But you can write several forms and than, time will tell u which one is better. Anyway, it is only one point of trade business. Don't give up! There're many and many business people around u. Just as Floor 2, next time, you can send half without attachments and the other with it.

One more, don't always send the same content to the same email addr. Maybe one or two weeks for a try is ok.

the first email is just introduction , do not attach anything or it will be spam!3OqA9n
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do not give up and try your best to find a suitable way to promote your product
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And also we need to send another e-mail to follow up.
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This is not the first letter.
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so i tried to send a mail with price list to see what i can do next

Reply #1 felixhuw's post

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and shall be glad to enter into business relations with you
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it is just my opinion

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Reply #10 felixhuw's post

so can you copy the letter here?

I read all,and learn more